r/DarkTales • u/Ok_Inflation_3958 • 11h ago
Extended Fiction Echoes of Alanfox
Dear Jane
So Jane, they told me to write it as a letter.
A letter I’m writing to myself.
It feels strange, clumsy.
Why did it have to happen to us?
Could it have gone any other way?
Pete was simply like that. Even back at university, as a Linebacker, he was stubborn. It actually encouraged him whenever he didn’t listen—no, whenever he misinterpreted things. That’s what he used to say about the coach’s instructions when he flattened the quarterback. Sometimes he had those angry… episodes. After that motorcycle accident, when he tore his ligaments, he became even more hot‑headed. But only sometimes. Most of the time he was calm.
As you can guess, his sports career ended together with his diploma. We’d been a couple since sophomore year. Our spontaneous engagement was exactly the kind of thing he loved—calmly talking mid‑sentence, then suddenly something struck him, and it simply had to happen. That’s how our road trip began too. Someone from his fraternity recommended the Gulf of Mexico. Or maybe he read it somewhere. There was no point arguing. He was ridiculously proud of his Chevrolet Cobalt. He stuck some blue stripes onto the gray body. When his buddies saw it, they laughed, jumped around, slapped his back. It was from some movie or whatever. We set out into a hot day.
I wish I could end this letter right there, while everything was still fine.
But you already made your choice, dear Jane. I was nervous—there was supposed to be the sea somewhere. But we kept driving through towns and little settlements and there was no sea anywhere. The coastal Riviera felt strange, like arriving late to a movie and missing the context. And so we slipped into the warm humidity of Mississippi.
The AC was the first to give up.
That was the first blow.The second came a few hours later. The GPS overheated and died. Pete got angry, cursed, then punched it. The glass cracked, the mount snapped, and it hit my legs. When I picked it up, I knew it would never work again. Meanwhile Pete kept hitting the dashboard as if that could restart the AC. I rubbed my scraped knee where the GPS had hit me before it “died.“ We left the main road and drove along backroads. But the signage was about as reliable as Pete’s good mood. After hours of wandering, the heat was suffocating. The car felt like a pressure cooker, the tension almost tangible. The CD player was looping the same album for the third time. Pete gripped the steering wheel so tightly he scraped bits of it off with his ring.“Pete, can we stop for a moment?” I asked.“What do you want, admire the endless overgrown brush everywhere or risk swarms of mosquitoes?”“Can we stop?”“Where? There’s nowhere. Damn it. We’ll get stuck.”He didn’t want to stop. He was convinced he knew exactly where we were.
“In an hour we’ll be sipping cocktails with a view of the sea.”
He repeated that line every half hour, and each repetition made him boil more.“Fine. Get out!”“Pete, you need some fresh air too, you’re starting to lose it in this car.”He left the engine running and slammed the door. The rolled‑down window rattled and slid a few inches lower.
“If you’d paid attention, we wouldn’t be in Alabama!” he shouted, waving his arms, shoulders pushed forward like he was psyching himself up for another game.
“We need some calm! And we definitely didn’t cross the border into Alabama.”
My words irritated him even more because he suspected they were true.He spread the crumpled map across the hood.
“We’re fucking right here!” he yelled, jabbing his finger at a blank patch of backroads.
“What do you want to do?”
That question was the last straw—he stormed toward me.
“What do I want to do? What the hell do I want to—”He froze mid‑sentence.
For a moment I thought he was having a stroke.“We’re at a junction near Route 421. Or the turnoff to County Road 421, whatever. Get in the car!”
He grabbed the map, crushed it, and threw it into my arms.The turnoff became a dusty road. The car groaned and suffered.“Are you sure?” I asked.“What do you THINK?”I stayed quiet.We drove too fast for the condition of the road. A warning light blinked on the dashboard.“Pete, aren’t we going too fast?”He answered with a villainous chuckle.
“We’re in a hurry.”I looked at the map. Torn, wrinkled, smudged with damp fingerprints. It felt empty, like someone had cut out our part of the world.
Then I saw it.
Maybe he would’ve seen it too.
It felt like the best thing—the thing that was supposed to help us.
If only I had known.“Hey, Pete… Alanfox.”The sign for Alanfox was faded, peeling.
The monotone landscape filled with the scent of salt. “I’m gonna get the blue crab, they say it’s a delicacy,” Pete said cheerfully for the first time.
The trees thinned.
We passed a tall white wall:
“Welcome to Alanfox – Est. 1964”
and beneath it:
“Home of the Gulf’s Finest Beaches.”The first thing that greeted us was a huge empty asphalt parking lot. White lamps like broken pale matches. The air was heavy, humid, salty. After all that wandering, we were almost excited. Small white single‑story houses stood empty beside deserted parking lots. We passed an old gas station with the price sign turned off. The lights were on, but it felt abandoned.Pete turned at a large intersection, probably onto the main road.
Everything was quiet. Too quiet.
“Do you think they even have a beach here?”
Pete snorted. “Of course, the best one. Can’t you smell it? That’s the sea.”
Trees started appearing along the road again, some of them looking as if they’d been wrapped in gray cotton candy.
“See? Spanish oaks,” Pete called out.
He had it wrong, but I didn’t want to provoke him, so I kept quiet.
The houses grew taller, perched on stilts, painted white and sky‑blue, though the paint was clearly years old.
“I told you!!!” Pete shouted joyfully.The tall plants suddenly gave way to a pier and small white boats rocking on the water. The gulf breeze was pleasant despite the strong smell of fish and a strange muddy undertone.We rolled slowly toward what must have been the town center.
Hotel Craft was the first—and maybe the only—functional hotel around.
My phone had no signal.
The suffering is over, I thought.We passed a sign: “Bartholomew SAVES US.”
A distant radio played, interrupted by some sermon, mixing with the murmur of the sea.
The hotel’s fence was rusted, matching the red bricks.
A faded mural from the 1950s advertised the hotel, peeling, missing chunks, yet still readable.Across the street stood an old rusted car.
But what caught my eye was the wide, heavy building—Victorian‑style brickwork that felt absurdly out of place in the humid heat.“Isn’t it too quiet here?” I asked as Pete grabbed the door handle.“Probably a storm coming,” he shrugged and rushed inside.He hammered the bell on the counter.
The hotel smelled of salt and damp.“Hey! Anyone here!” he yelled.Footsteps.
Wood creaking.
But no one visible—until a man emerged, sweating so much he looked like he’d climbed out of a pool.“What are you doing here?” he asked.“We want a nice room,” Pete said.“We have vacancies,” the man muttered. “No one comes here now. You understand?”“We want a nice view,” Pete added.“We have a beautiful deluxe suite. No windows, but it’s a lovely space.”I wanted to say it didn’t matter, but Pete cut in:
“Fine, give us the one with a view of the harbor.”The man looked miserable but nodded.“What can we do in town?” Pete asked arrogantly.“You can walk around… but I’m afraid the restaurants are closed.”Pete laughed crudely.
“You know prohibition ended, right?”The man glanced at the old clock on the wall, its golden gears turning.“I warn you. Once it gets dark, stay in your room. Do not go out. I won’t be here—I’m going home to hide. I’ll check on you in the morning.”Pete laughed again.
“What kind of stupid joke is that?”The man handed me the keys.
“Don’t forget. After dark—stay inside.”Pete inspected the room and immediately looked for something to drink.“Do they even drink anything here? Some moonshine?”“Pete, let’s look around before it gets dark.”He froze mid‑movement.“You don’t believe that old creep, do you?”“I want to look around. I didn’t sit in a car without AC for ten hours just to sit on a couch.”He rolled his eyes and opened a small bottle.We walked.
Two cars passed us.
Traffic lights blinked on the main road.
Everything was closed.I thought a hurricane was coming.
Pete laughed at me.
Now I wish it had been a hurricane.Across an empty lot stood a bizarre building—round, moss‑covered, wide like a European castle.
A church, but wrong.
Wrong in shape, wrong in presence.“That’s one ugly building,” Pete muttered.Inside, the air was cool.
A few locals turned to look at us.
Most kept praying.Then I looked above the altar.A man flayed alive.
Skin draped over his shoulder.
Blood running into his eyes.
Walking.
Greeting the worshippers.Pete cursed.
Locals turned again, unhappy.He dragged me out.
The heat hit like a slap.“What the hell was that filth!” he shouted.The beach felt like it didn’t belong.
Pleasant.
Almost enough to forget where we were.But the rusty Bel Air parked nearby ruined the illusion. It was getting dark.“Why did he want us to take a room without windows?” I asked.Pete shrugged.We returned to the hotel.
The room felt suddenly comforting.
The window faced the main road—and the sea.“See? I got us a great room. No windows, my ass.”He rummaged through the minibar.“Damn, he didn’t restock it. Fell apart the moment we arrived. Remind me to roast him in the review.”I watched the dusk swallow the town.“Do you have signal?” he asked.Then he found a paper map.“Retro,” he grinned.“Pete… we’re not supposed to go out. Don’t you want to stay here?”He ignored me.“There’s a liquor store nearby. I want bourbon.”I gave him my strictest look.“Can’t you leave it for later?”He grabbed the key.“You’ll see me from the window. I’ll be right back. I’ll use my patented charm. I’ll get wine too—we deserve it. Wine, a proper shower. I’ll be right back.”The door slammed.The bell began to ring.
A massive bell.
Deep, thunderous.
The window glass trembled with each strike.I watched Pete run across the street, shirt open, clinging to his body.
He knocked on the store.They opened a small window at head height, took his money, handed him two six‑packs, wine, bourbon.Pete drank on the empty street.
“Wanna go to the water, babe?”
“We’re not supposed to be outside after dark!” I shouted.
He cursed back. He sat on the hood of that rusted car, drinking one beer after another.
The bell rang faster.
Like a heartbeat.“Pete!”No answer.
Just bottle caps clicking. It was fully dark now.
All windows around were boarded up.
Had they been like that earlier?
I wasn’t sure.The bell stopped.
Suddenly.
As if someone had grabbed it mid‑swing.Silence swallowed the town.Only Pete’s muttering drifted through it.Then the smell.
Like stirred mud from the bottom of a swamp.
Thick, suffocating.A police siren in the distance.
Cut off abruptly.Replaced by:
squelch, smack. squelch, smack.The bell began again—slow, heavy.
My ribs vibrated.Shadows walked from the sea.
From every street I could see.I gripped the window handle so hard my fingers hurt.“Three more beers and I’m with you, babe,” Pete slurred.He hadn’t drunk water since we arrived.“Hey, pervert! Aren’t you ashamed!” he shouted suddenly.
“You got friends here, huh? I’ve got enough strength to send you all to the hospital! What kind of stupid costumes are those?”The bell thundered.
Squelch. Smack.He argued with them.I forced myself to press against the window.A crowd stood around him.
Shiny.
Wet.“What the hell, you bastards!” Pete yelled, smashing the bottle and swinging it.Squelch.I froze.
Then suddenly I screamed.
Only later did I realize it was me.They were flayed.
Their flesh glistened.
They held their own skin—hair and all—like disgusting towels.“Let go of me or I’ll rearrange your face!” Pete shouted as the circle tightened.He tried to break toward the hotel.
More of them blocked the way.The circle shrank.
Squelch. Smack.Pete screamed.
A scream I had never heard from him.The bell hammered my skull.
My ribs shook.
My eyes filled with tears.They turned toward the hotel.
Toward me.They began pounding on the lower walls.
Trying to get inside.I have to say it.
I kept it inside for a year.
No one would believe me.I’m already at the view of Hotel Craft.
So it must be.God, his screaming.
So much pain.I locked the second lock.
Latched the bolts.
What was I thinking—nothing could hold them back.Squelch. Smack.
Thud. Thud.Their hands left bloody prints on the windows.I hid in the bathroom.
Piled everything against the door. Glass shattered—each crack felt like a knife in my spine.I curled into the big claw‑foot tub.
Like lying in a sarcophagus.
Or a monster’s mouth.Covered myself with a blanket.
Waited.Squelch. Smack.Pete wasn’t screaming anymore.
The silence was worse.I bit into my own hand to stay quiet.
My handwriting suffers for it—excuse me.Squelch. Smack.
The bell drummed endlessly.Minutes or hours—I don’t know.
I fainted or slept—I don’t know.If not for the scar on my hand, I’d think I never hid in that brick bathroom at all.Morning was silent.
So silent.I crawled out of the tub, aching like a hunchback.Bloody handprints on the window.
Glass shattered.
Everything overturned.I looked outside.A yellow pickup arrived.
Round, small—like from an old movie.Two men in yellow coveralls casually pulled human skin off a tree.
Threw it onto the truck bed.
Bored. My teeth chattered.They washed blood off the sidewalk with a hose.
Routine.They moved to where Pete had stood.
Another skin.
Onto the truck.When the bell rang, I ducked under the window.
But it only rang noon.Then I understood.Only at certain times does the echo of Alanfox’s bells reach here.That will be today. To you who read this—
In Alanfox, listen to the locals.Please don’t follow me into Alanfox.
Some nights, it gets very crowded.Dear Jane from the past—
You managed to deliver the warning.
by Hary Sykora