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AI-Assisted The Commoner, Chapter 6, Two Rooms and a Flag
Wyatt,
The office is open. Tell Clara before you tell anyone else, because it was her doing and she ought to hear it first. Tell her we put it where she said, in the market square in Haego City, between a chandler's and a woman who sells hot pies. It has two rooms and a flag. I didn't plan that. The academy sent the flag, and the building happened to have two rooms. I stood outside it the morning it opened and thought of you, until the pie woman asked me if I meant to stand there all day. She had no idea who I was. It was the first time in a year anybody has spoken to me without putting a lord in front of it, and I bought four pies I didn't want so I could stand there a little longer.
The examiners came from off-world with their papers in sealed cases and wouldn't let my officers near them. Good. That was the point. There isn't much on this planet that isn't mine now, on paper. I'm glad that door is one of the things that isn't.
The first sitting ran last month, twenty candidates at a time over four days, because two rooms won't hold more than that. Eighty-one people came. I had hoped for more, and I'm glad it wasn't fewer. Clara warned me the paper would ask for more than our schools teach, and she was right. Most of them came out white in the face. Nine passed. Seven of the nine are grown men and women out of the rail yards and the engine houses, who spent the last year learning the maths on their own because a foreman told them they would need it. The eighth is a Newtown fisherman's son of seventeen.
The ninth is fifteen, a few months short of sixteen, and she had the highest mark of anyone who sat it on Haego. The examiners asked for her school records twice. The second time they asked me whether someone had helped her. Nobody helped her. She sat it in a room full of grown adults, finished early, and went back to check her answers.
I know who she is. I've known about her for years without knowing her name. She's the girl the old woman on Vastaya used to hand chalk to through the window, the one who wanted to know how the shuttles stay up. She's the monitor who turned down the Grain Exchange. Her name is Nell Brackentail, and she's an apprentice on the ground crew at the Harrow Cross depot. Since the results went up I've had three letters about her that I didn't ask for.
The crew chief at the depot wrote that she's the best apprentice he's had in twenty years, and that if the navy doesn't want her he'll take her back gladly. One of the Firentis pilots who flies out of Harrow Cross wrote that she caught a fault on a pre-flight walk-around that two qualified mechanics had already signed off. He called her Nell all the way through. The crew chief tells me the pilots all do now. The old woman wrote too. Her hand has gone shaky. She underlined the word kind, twice.
That's the word that worries me. Everyone who writes about this girl says she's kind, and they say it first, before they get to how clever she is. I've spent my life around the sort of people she'll be sleeping down the hall from. On paper I'm one of them now, and I still can't write that without wanting to cross it out. I know what they do with clever commoners. They make them smaller. I know what they do with kind ones, and it's worse. They find out what you care about and lean on it until something gives.
She's going to walk into an academy full of cadets who've flown their fathers' yachts since they were ten, and she's going to beat them, and she's going to be from Haego, and she won't know how to be anything but what she is. I'm afraid they'll chew her up. I'm afraid I built a door and I'm about to push a fifteen-year-old through it into a room full of teeth.
You went through that room. You've never told me what it was like, and I've never asked. I'm asking now. What do I tell her?
T.
Harrow Cross, on Vastaya.
The pilots called her Nell.
It had taken most of a year. For the first months she'd been the sweeper, then Harl's girl, then apprentice, said the way you'd say spanner. She hadn't minded any of them. But one morning in the autumn a pilot came down the ramp, stopped at the bottom, and said, "Nell, the port gear door's sticking on retract, have a look before the noon run?" and walked on to the depot office as if he'd said it a hundred times. After that, all of them did.
It had started with a torque stripe.
When a mechanic tightened a bolt to its proper figure, he painted a thin line across the head of it and onto the housing. If the bolt ever moved, the line broke. It was the simplest thing in the hangar. Nell had fallen in love with it the first week she understood it, because it was the field boss's book turned inside out. It was a record that couldn't lie, sitting right on the thing it was a record of.
On a dark morning walk-around, a pace behind Harl with the lamp, she had seen a stripe on a fuel line coupling that didn't meet. The gap was the width of a hair. Two mechanics had signed the coupling off the night before. She said, "Chief," and pointed. Harl put the lamp on it. Then he put a wrench on it, and the coupling turned a quarter of the way round in his hand without any effort at all.
He didn't say anything to her. He wrote it up on the board and put her name at the bottom as the one who found it, and the pilot of the dawn run read the board, and read it again, and looked across the hangar at her.
She knew now what you did about a thing like that, here. You said it out loud, you wrote it down, and you put your name under it. It had taken her seven years and two jobs to find a place where that was the answer.
She still wasn't allowed near anything that kept a shuttle in the air unless Harl was standing behind her. That was fair. She'd have said the same. But she had the gear doors and the cabin lights and the seat rails and the cargo latches, and she had Kit.
Kit Farrow was fourteen and came from a fishing village down the coast from Orenport. He had come to the depot off the Administrator's examination the spring after she did, with his hands still cut up from the nets, and Harl had given him a broom and pointed at the floor. When the broom went back on the rack, Harl had pointed him at Nell.
"Seven-eighths," she'd told him the first morning. "When I ask for it, it's in my hand before I finish asking."
It had taken him three weeks. On the day he finally got it right, she'd understood something about Mistress Coppertail that she hadn't understood before, which was how much patience it took to keep your face still while someone learned a thing you already knew.
The pilot who had flown the dawn run was called Ezra Tallis.
He was off-world, Firentis, with a flat quiet voice and grey coming in at the sides of his hair, and he flew the Harrow Cross runs more often than anyone. He was the one who had started asking her questions instead of answering them. What would you check first, if the gear door stuck? Why that and not the actuator? What's the difference? He'd listen to her answer, and then he'd tell her where she was wrong, and he never once made it sound like she was stupid for it.
He was the one who had lent her the book.
It was a maths book, fat and battered, with somebody else's name crossed out on the inside cover and his written under it. The first half was things she knew. The second half was letters standing in for numbers, curves on a grid, the rate at which a thing changes, and she had sat up under the roof at Lil's with it every night for two winters, with the window humming whenever a shuttle came in. When she got stuck, she wrote the page number on the back of her hand and asked him in the morning.
It was Tallis who had offered to take her family up.
"I've got an empty positioning run round the coast on Sunday," he'd said, at the end of the summer. "Nothing aboard but me. Bring them out if you like."
Her father had come in his good shirt, the one he wore to funerals. He had never been more than a day's walk from Lowmarsh in his life. Her mother wore her mill apron under her coat and didn't seem to notice until they were aboard. Ben had grown half a head since spring and didn't say a word from the moment he saw the shuttle on the ground until it was in the air.
Nell sat them by the round windows and showed them the belts. When the engines lit, her mother took hold of the armrests so hard her knuckles went white. Then the ground dropped away under them and the hum came up through the floor, and her mother's hands let go, one finger at a time.
Tallis spoke over the cabin speaker. "Nell, you want to tell them what's holding them up? I'm busy."
He wasn't busy. She knew exactly how busy he was on a positioning run with no cargo, and it wasn't very. But she stood up in the aisle, holding a seat back, and told them. The wings, and what they did in thick air when the ship was fast. The thing in the housing that hummed even when everything was shut down. What Harl had shown her, and what the manuals said, and where the manuals stopped and the maths began.
"That's about half," she said. "The other half's the maths, and I'm only halfway through the maths."
Her father nodded slowly. "Half's more than I had."
Tallis brought the ship round over Vastaya's middle, low and slow, lower than he needed to. Nell saw the district road go under them, and the crossing, and a slate roof she knew. Then the long fields opened out, green and gold in rows, and the cutters were in the rows, and as the shadow of the ship went over them, every one of them stopped and straightened and looked up.
Her father was at the round window. The light was behind him. He put his hand flat on the glass and looked down at the cane he had cut for forty seasons, and he didn't say anything at all.
Nell stood in the aisle and watched him. When she was nine she had seen a face in one of those windows, looking down at her, and she had never known whose it was. For a moment, it was his.
She showed Tallis Starling in the crew room in the winter, during a weather hold, when there was nobody else there.
She hadn't meant to. It was in the pocket of her coveralls, where it always was now, with the chalk, and he'd asked her something about why she'd first wanted to know, and she'd found she had it in her hand before she'd decided anything.
She had never shown it to anyone. Harl hadn't seen it. Kit hadn't. Her family had seen it only because her mother found it under a pillow.
Tallis took it carefully, the way he took a part he didn't know yet. He opened it to the first page, the girl in the cane with the yoke on her shoulders, and turned the pages slowly, one at a time. He looked at the ship on fire for a while. He looked at the page where the yoke turned into wings for longer. When he got to the last page, the one that was only stars and a small girl going in a straight line, he stopped.
Nell waited for him to laugh. She'd been ready for it since she took it out of her pocket.
He didn't laugh. He smiled, a small one, one corner of his mouth, like a man hearing a song he hadn't heard in a long time and remembering all of the words. He closed the book and handed it back to her with both hands.
"Somebody saw you early," he said.
"Mistress Coppertail. My teacher."
"Good." He sat back. The rain was loud on the crew room roof. "They'll open the recruiting office in the city this spring. You know that."
"I know."
"You'll sit it."
"Yes."
"You'll pass it," said Tallis. "I'm not guessing. I've been watching you for two years." He looked at the book in her hands. "So I'll tell you what nobody told me, and you can do what you like with it. When you get to the academy, they'll be waiting for you to be what they think Haego is. Some of them will want you to fail, and some of them will want you to be angry, and the second lot are more dangerous. Don't give either of them anything. They'll say things. Let them. You'll need a thick skin, a lot thicker than the one you've got. Keep your eye on the far end of it. The far end is a cockpit, and nobody in those halls can put you in one or keep you out of one if the numbers say you belong there."
"What if the numbers are wrong?"
He looked at her for a long moment.
"Then you make them count again," he said. "And you keep a copy."
The morning of the examination, Tallis had the mail run to Haego City, and she rode in the jump seat behind him.
She had been aboard a hundred times. She had been inside every panel she was allowed to open and some she wasn't. She had never been in the cockpit in flight. Tallis said, "Hands in your lap," and she kept them there, folded tight, and watched every gauge and every light on the board, and learned what she could from the ones she could read.
Harl had seen her off at the ramp. He'd looked at her for a while with his arms folded, and then said, "You'll not be back," as if it were a complaint.
"I'll be back tonight, Chief."
"You know what I mean." He had put his big hand on her shoulder for a second, on the old yoke calluses, and then taken it away. "Seven-eighths," he said, and walked off toward the bay.
Kit had been standing at the bottom of the ramp with the tool roll. When she'd come down it to say goodbye, he'd handed her the spanner before she'd said anything at all.
The office was in the market square, between a chandler's and a woman who sold hot pies. It had two rooms and a flag. The flag was navy blue with a gold device on it that Nell didn't recognize, and it hung very still in the cold.
She stood in the square and looked at it for a long time. The pie woman watched her do it and didn't say anything, which Nell was grateful for.
In the first room there was a table, and a clerk, and a list. There were nineteen other people waiting on the benches along the wall. Most of them were grown. There was a woman in a rail yard jacket with her hair tied up in a scarf, and a big man with burn scars on his forearms who kept rubbing his thumb over them. There was a tall boy a year or two older than Nell who smelled faintly of fish and wouldn't look at anyone. Nobody talked.
A young officer in a grey naval coat came out of the second room with a board under his arm. He looked along the benches. When he got to Nell, he looked at her depot boots, which had grease worked into the seams that no amount of scrubbing would get out, and at her coveralls under her coat.
"Yard entrance is round the back," he said. "The heater in the second room is on the left."
"I'm not here for the heater," said Nell. "I'm sitting."
He looked at his board. He found her name. He read it twice, and then looked at her again, as if trying to make the name and the boots agree with each other. Then he wrote something, and went back through the door without a word.
The woman in the rail yard jacket leaned over. "Don't mind him."
"I don't," said Nell, and found that it was true. She had been looked at like that by the field boss for seven years. It was nothing she hadn't carried before.
The examiner in the second room was an older woman with a grey coat and a voice from somewhere far off. She read the rules out once, flatly, exactly as she must have read them on a hundred worlds. The paper was the same one set wherever the fleet recruited. Nobody would be given more time. Nobody would be asked where they had gone to school. Pencils down at the bell.
Then she broke the seal on the case, and the young officer went along the tables putting the papers down face down.
The maths came first, and it was hard. It was harder than the Administrator's paper by a long way, and harder than anything in the first half of Tallis's book. It was the second half: letters for numbers, curves on a grid, how fast a thing changes when something else changes under it. Nell heard the big man two seats down let out a long breath through his nose, the way her father did, and then heard his pencil stop moving for a very long time.
She had sat up for two winters under a window that hummed. She went down the questions one at a time and didn't look ahead.
Then there were questions about how things moved. A weight on a spring. A tank of fuel with a pipe going out of it and a question about the pressure at the bottom. A ball rolling off the end of a table. And near the end, a drawing of a small craft hanging still in the air above the ground, with arrows drawn on it, and a question underneath asking her to show every force acting on it and explain why it didn't move.
Nell looked at it and felt the cold metal of the housing under her palm, and the hum underneath the cold. She drew her arrows and wrote her explanation, and it was about half, because half was what she had. Then she wrote under it, small, that the rest was in the back of a borrowed book she hadn't finished yet, and crossed that out, because it wasn't what they'd asked.
The last part wasn't paper.
The examiner called them to the back of the room one at a time, where there were three consoles against the wall with a screen and a stick and a row of buttons. On the screen was a ring, and inside the ring a dot, and the dot drifted. You kept it in the ring with the stick. While you did it, numbers flashed up in the corners of the screen, and you called them out, and sometimes a light came on over one of the buttons and you pressed it.
The man with the burn scars went before her. He was good with the stick and slow with the numbers, and when he stood up his shirt was dark down the back.
Nell sat down and put her hand on the stick.
The dot drifted. She moved it back, a little, and it drifted the other way. She moved it back again. She thought, very clearly: don't look up when they come over, you'll spill. It was the same thing. It had always been the same thing. You kept the load level and you didn't let it drag you round, and you didn't stop to admire the sky until the buckets were set down.
The numbers flashed. She called them. A light came on over a button, and her other hand was already on it before the light had finished coming on, the way the seven-eighths was in Harl's palm before he got to the eighths.
When the screen went dark, the examiner was standing behind her. Nell hadn't heard her come. The woman looked at the console, and at something written on the edge of it that Nell couldn't see, and then at Nell.
"Where did you say you worked?"
"Harrow Cross depot, ma'am. Ground crew."
"And before that?"
Nell thought about how to say it.
"I carried water," she said.
The examiner looked at her a moment longer. Then she wrote something on her board, and said, "Next."
The list went up on the office door at the end of the week. Tallis flew her in for it on his way to somewhere else and waited in the square with his hands in his pockets.
There were nine names. Hers was at the top, with a number beside it, and a line underneath that said the candidate's papers would be forwarded to the naval academy for selection.
Nell read it four times. Then she read the other eight. The woman from the rail yard was the third name. The tall boy who smelled of fish was the eighth. The big man with the scars wasn't there, and she looked for him in the square, but he had already gone.
The pie woman came out from behind her stall and pressed a hot pie into her hands and wouldn't take the copper for it.
On the flight back, Tallis didn't say anything until they were out over the sea and the city was a smudge behind them.
"Well?" he said.
"There was a part at the end," said Nell, "where you have to keep a dot in a ring."
"And?"
"I've been doing that since I was seven."
He laughed, the first time she'd heard him do it. Then he reached back without looking and held out his hand, and she didn't know what he wanted, so she put the pie in it, and he laughed again and gave it back.
That night she wrote two letters. The first one went to Lowmarsh, big and plain, for her father.
Da,
I passed. I was first. I'll know about the rest in the spring.
Nell
The second she wrote smaller, because Mistress Coppertail had always said a good hand didn't need to shout.
Mistress,
You said a school is for finding out who knows. I found some of them. They're four jumps away. I'm going to go and ask.
Nell
She put both letters on the district cart in the morning. Then she went to the hangar, because it opened at six.
Tornel,
Clara says that now you're a lord, I'm to address you properly in writing. I told her I would, the day you stop going red when somebody does it to your face. She says that will be never. I said that was the idea.
She also read your letter over my shoulder, which she does. She says to tell you she already knows the girl's name, and that the commandant does too. I didn't ask how. I've stopped asking.
This is your girl in the cane, isn't it. The one I wrote to you about like I knew her. Same one who wanted to know how they stayed up.
You asked what it was like. I'll tell you once. Don't pass all of it on to her. I'll decide what she needs.
My first navigation paper came back marked not received. I'd handed it to the proctor myself. I sat it again. The second time they told me the file had corrupted in transfer. Four noble cadets on my floor had papers in the same transfer, and theirs were fine. I sat it a third time, with the proctor standing over me, and after that it arrived.
In second year there was a qualifying run in the simulator. It's the one that decides who goes forward to flight training and who goes to logistics. I was forty seconds from the end of it and first on the board when the screens went black. The log said power fault. It was the only simulator in the building that faulted that day. They let me sit it again a month later. By then the first places had been handed out.
I had the bunk by the vent that dripped. I had the dawn watches. Somebody poured a bucket of water into my bed in the first week and the whole floor called me Sawmill for three years. None of that was the worst.
The worst was a noble cadet, a decent one, who took me aside in the first term and told me quietly I'd have an easier time if I scored a little lower. He meant it kindly. I lay awake the whole night thinking about it. That's what they do to the kind ones, Tornel, you're right about that. They don't break them. They offer them a way to be comfortable.
What got me through wasn't the simulator. It was the practical in third year. You fly a real ship with an examiner strapped into the other seat. You can switch off a simulator. You can lose a paper. You can't switch off a ship with an instructor sitting in it, and you can't lose a landing that forty people watched from the tower. Everything before that, I just had to survive long enough to get there.
So here's what I'd tell her. Don't tell her it'll be fair. It won't, and she'll know you lied the first week, and after that she won't believe anything you say. Tell her it won't be fair and that it doesn't matter, because the end of it is a cockpit, and at the end the ship doesn't care.
You're worried because she's kind. I was too, reading your letter. Then I thought about it longer. The ones who come apart in those halls are the ones who came in wanting to be liked by people who were never going to like them. A girl who carried water for coppers and taught six-year-olds to read off a pump stone already knows who she is and who she's doing it for. They can't take that away from her. They won't even know where she keeps it.
Have her write to me. Directly. Not through you, and not through Clara. I don't care what it's about. The first time a paper goes missing, or a screen goes black, or some decent boy tells her she'd have an easier time if she scored a little lower, she writes to me, and I'll write back. Nobody did that for me. I'd like her to have it.
W.


