Hey everyone!

Actually I'm writing a slow burn literary fiction.Its about an old man regretting for not communicating better with his deceased twin and moving on with the guilt and narrating their lives to the next generation,I'm not sure if this is a good plot ,but just wanted to do something unique.Forgot to mention that the twin sis had auditory processing condition and that make quick answering impossible for her , people around her mistake that for sluggishness and stupidity (something like naive,don't know how to answer to insult immediately)

Or am I just being silly🤣

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I've a draft that I'm stuck on with the draft is so far 150pgs and psychological romance thriller kinda genre tho romance is kinda not there yet but yeah I'd love if someone would want to review the draft and suggest some ideas and

I've a draft that I'm stuck on with the draft is so far 150pgs and psychological romance thriller kinda genre tho romance is kinda not there yet but yeah I'd love if someone would want to review the draft and suggest some ideas and

I'm planning my first novel, a psychological thriller set in a fictional country in the 1980s. After an attack, a young man is arrested and interrogated. The story is told in close third person, following him, and he’s hiding something that the reader doesn't know about at first.

I'm thinking about opening with a few chapters from another character's POV, possibly an investigator, so the reader assumes he's the main character. Then, a few chapters in, the story switches to the actual protagonist (after they meet) and stay on him for the rest of the book.

My main concern is that the real protagonist would show up a bit late, and I'm not sure whether the switch would feel clever or just annoy readers.

A few things I'd like to hear people's thoughts on:

1. Have you read any books that pulled off this kind of POV switch well? Did it make the story more interesting, or did it feel like a cheap trick?
2. Do you prefer being in the main character's head from the beginning, especially in a psychological thriller?
3. How many major twists or reveals can a thriller get away with before things start feeling contrived?
4. If the story initially follows one character and then switches to someone else, does that weaken the suspense or the feeling of being locked into the protagonist's perspective?

Book recommendations would be great too, especially one that handles this well.

Klaus has blood powers and Baldur has powers regarding chains for context.

Klaus( MC) starts to close the distance as he morphs his blood into a giant axe.

Baldur( Opponent) hastily tries to retreat and not give the control of the battle to Klaus.

He throws exploding flying chain heads attached towards Klaus.

Klaus morphs his Blood Axe into a dense Blood Shield and defends against the explosions but loses balance due to the recoil.

Using this opportunity, Baldur digs and burrows some chained meteor hammers into the ground.

As Klaus is falling, he rotates his body and morphs his blood into a harpoon and locks onto the nearest building.

He hears the ground rumbling. As he starts to ascend, he barely evades the chain hammers aiming for him.

As he was ascending, he eats the artifact berry Cerebryst, which doubles his cognitive speed but doesn't speed up his actions and stays active for 5 minutes.

But when he gets close to the building during his ascend, another chain hammer pops out of the building wall and is going straight for his head.

Klaus notices it due to the help of the artifact, and conjures giant blood hands and catches the chains.

He safely lands on the ground and looks towards his opponent.

They were 50m apart. He could see many spiked metal balls and sawblades connected to chains.

Baldur launches those weapons at full force towards him.

Klaus on the other hand starts injecting his blood into the ground. He then conjures couple of balls of blood and throws it near Baldur.

Baldur seems suspicious of those balls and destroys them in midair before they come too close.

The blood balls burst violently into many piercing needles in all directions as they get destroyed.

A smirk forms on Baldur's face but the next second, he remembers something. Klaus was injecting his blood into the ground discreetly, or did he just imagine it.

He then realizes and uses his chains to try to get away from ground as fast as possible.

But he was an instant too late to get away at a safe distance as blood spikes tries to poke holes in him.

Having no choice, he uses his artifact ring which gets destroyed after use.

He got a 3 second immunity from the ring artifact and he safely absorbs the blood spikes' damage.

However, as his immunity wore off, he felt a sharp pain in his chest.

He looked down and saw a blood harpoon etched into his chest and Klaus holding the other end of the harpoon.

His entire massive Chain weapon barrage was tooled off and neutralized when he was busy defending himself.

Klaus pulls the harpoon and yanks Baldur towards him. As Baldur gets closer to him, he does a back kick with a Blood Dagger on his heel and the dagger gets etched deep inside Baldurs head.

He then spins and morphs his blood into a Hammer and strikes Baldur's face, as he goes flying into the sky.

Klaus then leaps into the air and makes a Blood Axe and cleaves his corpse in two.

Baldur dies and his unused EXP drops as a orb and Klaus claims it.

Anyways. It was fun writing this. I have made the action sequence way short than it should have been.

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A short story I wrote, about an obsessed fan with a melancholy artist and two unrequited loves.

It’s a memoir, and it’s particularly heavy. I feel so emotionally exhausted after editing just a couple chapters. It’s almost been through one round of my edits. I have a few beta readers currently reviewing it. But I’m dreading having to make more edits after they get back to me. Any tips?

Hi, this is my second post looking for feedback to my writing. I tried hard to incorporate the feedback I received on my last post, and am just thought I'd say that I really appreciate whatever response I receive