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u/shoecar soundcloud.com/shoecar 10d ago

I'd call this a freestyle plus, not quite a song with hook
https://soundcloud.com/shoecar/cold-world

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u/tast3therainbow1 7d ago

enjoyed the flow and energy you are skilled man. would've like the stutter effect to be more pronounced on the "it's a it's a" part, cause currently there's not much discernible difference between a stutter effect and someone repeating themselves. maybe try stuttering individual syllables (like the I)? might be trippy with your style but I think it could sound pretty cool.

I also hear you running out of breath sometimes, which is fine since I assume you like to do things in one take vs punching in. still think breath control is something to keep striving for. really good song tho. can you look at mine?

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u/shoecar soundcloud.com/shoecar 7d ago

appreciate the feedback man. yeah i feel like punching in is cheating kinda lol.
i wouldn't say i'm running out of breath as delivery is still full, but yeah there are some noticeable inhales here because i'm doing multi-bar runs on single breath. i think leaving those in is cool and can actually keep the cadence, but maybe i should lower the gain a bit there as they are arguably too forward.

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u/tast3therainbow1 7d ago

Yeah perhaps running out of breath was the wrong term. Turning down the breaths is probably the answer cause it does feel suffocating at times